Thursday, July 18, 2013

Commentary # 2




      In this Rhetorical Critique, it is focused on the article"Believe Me,Its Torture". In my evaluation I hav, there a few points I'd like to address. First off since there is no title for this critique I would recommend that before a title is chosen, first figure out the theme and audience this essay is being read to, once that is figured out relate both to find a title that really reflects the true meaning of this critique.
     The argument in this paper is clear and straight, topic sentences are place at each paragraph to provide the reader (me) a little taste before diving in, which I consider a plus to this critique. In some strategies such as kairos, I believe was spent little on and some further expansion may do some good.
 In the ethos portion of the essay some concrete points do show that the authors credibility, there are more than one examples that hardens the writer stance on that Hitchen's article has ethos and that he uses it very well. Pathos which is a the appeal to the emotional side was fulfilled by the writer , but I think that more should be add to stretching this part for example Hitchen’s phobia with suffocating  and how he uses that to create sympathy toward the audience.
          The logical appeal has some very good points, very fluid and really projected Hitchen’s strategy of using logos, also the writer doesn’t have to, but a little expansion on this would be a great addition to this paper.
There is not much to say about this critique, it touched on base with all strategies. The writer made paper that is understandable and provide good incite on this article. Though I did add suggestions, I believe that the writer could make a better paper that he already has if he takes this feedback into consideration.

      

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